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I have to write a 1200 word essay comparing/contrasting the north and the south before and after the civil war. I have 971 words, and Im done. I honestly cant thing of anything else to add... how am i supposed to come up with 200+ words??

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Go into more detial. I am not in school anymore and history WAS my worst subject. I can't help you on exactly what to write... sorry!!

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Change any "can't" "don't" "weren't" type words into "can not" "do not" "were not" etc. Be descriptive and mention details related to what your topic, If you have a introduction add some details (but not everything) into that to explain where your essay is going, expand the conclusion to incorporte some of the other details mentioned before, if possible come up with another paragraph of differences if you can, but if you can't it's better to expand on your strong paragraphs then to include a weak one... good luck!

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add a few "very"s. and lots of fluff. detail, "general so and so, who sported a very gross dirty beard" maybe not that exactly, but you know what i mean.

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Use a thesaurus and add descriptive words wherever you can.

So instead of "He was mean", you can say "So and so had a strong penchant for cruelty" or something.

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http://ks.essortment.com/civilwarfacts_rwby.htm

I dont know if this will help for your paper, but maybe you can find something to BS about (one thing the armies had in common was that more soldiers died from disease ..........blah blah blah)

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thanks. Ill go into detail, and change words... thanks for your help ladies

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I have a lot of work to do myself, but if anyone needs help proof-reading something, I'm an English major, so I could help.. Just PM me and I'll send you my e-mail address. My husband proof reads all my papers and it helps SO MUCH to have an extra set of eyes!

- Susie